While the majority of the application looks good, we would like to ask for an expanded abilities section, and a revised first person sample.
In the abilities section, we would like to see more mention of the down-sides of Miroku's wind tunnel. The reason for requesting a revised first person sample is that the first thread linked (the test drive) is third person format and we do not feel we can accurately gauge characterization from the second thread. You are welcome to link another thread or post, or write one out. While we will not ask for a revision of the third person sample, we will ask you to bear in mind that the contact list on the phones is picture only and does not have the names of the residents written anywhere.
We apologize for the inconvenience. You have one week to submit these revisions, thank you.
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In the abilities section, we would like to see more mention of the down-sides of Miroku's wind tunnel. The reason for requesting a revised first person sample is that the first thread linked (the test drive) is third person format and we do not feel we can accurately gauge characterization from the second thread. You are welcome to link another thread or post, or write one out. While we will not ask for a revision of the third person sample, we will ask you to bear in mind that the contact list on the phones is picture only and does not have the names of the residents written anywhere.
We apologize for the inconvenience. You have one week to submit these revisions, thank you.