While the majority of the application looks good, we'd like to ask for a revised personality section.
We feel the current personality section places more emphasis on her history and backstory than discussing and describing Lacie's personality. While giving examples of her behavior is important, we would like more discussion of how and/or why she behaves that way, and a more in-depth exploration of her character beyond her function in the plot.
Additionally, seeing as we have Oz as a taken character in the game, Lacie would be unable to use the "Black Rabbit contract" as an ability.
We apologize for the inconvenience. You have one week to reply to these revisions. Thank you.
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We feel the current personality section places more emphasis on her history and backstory than discussing and describing Lacie's personality. While giving examples of her behavior is important, we would like more discussion of how and/or why she behaves that way, and a more in-depth exploration of her character beyond her function in the plot.
Additionally, seeing as we have Oz as a taken character in the game, Lacie would be unable to use the "Black Rabbit contract" as an ability.
We apologize for the inconvenience. You have one week to reply to these revisions. Thank you.